Comments - criticism please!
Parents' nightmares.
So many scares.
A baby
So tragically,
Could no longer be
Purity.
These long days,
Love's an act on a stage,
setting many hearts ablaze.
Muted like the air.
Hearts begin to tear
No one can win, I swear.
This soul is drifting away.
No longer breaking,
like the day.
They need stronger hearts,
if they are going to part
with what was in,
Death's hands from the start.
Hey Charlotte, this is great! "No longer breaking, like the day". I don't really understand what you're trying to say here. Are you saying that as the person (I presume) who is dying is no longer breaking the day with their sudden death, or do you just simply mean that the day is starting? This is lovely otherwise, with a really unexpected ending
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